by It’s time for another Six Sentence Sunday, a blogging experience where participants post six sentences from something they’re working on or something they’ve published. You can visit their site to check out the other participants or to join in on the fun.
This week’s submission is from my work-in-progress, Judah and Tamar, which will be my next blog series, starting January 2013. Tamar has just watched Onan, her abusive husband, collapse on the floor; this is her response.
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She looks down at him, his eyes open, his face frozen in terror, begging her for help. If ever there was any humanity in her, he seems to say, but he beat it out of her, and as he breathes his last, Tamar can only marvel at what has occurred. She had been expecting a beating, a rape. Now her husband was dead, leaving her a widow – again. Trouble with his family would surely follow, but at least she wouldn’t have to endure his abuse anymore. She wouldn’t miss him.
This is very powerful, Ruth. You capture the conflicting feelings going through Tamar’s mind very well.
Thanks so much for your comments. I appreciate them.
Oh wow, I’ll have to come back next week to see what happens!
It’s a great story. Thanks for your comments. Hope to see you next week.
The Old Testament is such a fund of fabulous and powerful stories. You’re adapting this one to make it very accessible.
Thanks Elin. That’s my goal. The stories are awesome and there’s no reason they shouldn’t be enjoyed or experienced by all. Thanks again for your comments.
I love that instead of being horrified or frightened, she marvels at what just happened. Very nice six.
A not-so-bad-surprise is what it was, though it has it’s repercussions. Thanks for your comments for stopping by.
I wondered what was going to happen with these two – wow. Powerful and definitely makes me *need* to keep reading. Great excerpt!