Six Sentence Sunday

I’ve been ill this past week, and so haven’t gotten much writing done, but I am glad to be back for the second to last Six Second Sunday. In today’s post, borrowing from my work-in-progress, Ruth and Boaz, Boaz has just bought the rights to Naomi’s field and with it, the right to marry to Ruth; and  prepares to bring the news to Ruth. Let me know what you think of today’s excerpt; I appreciate your comments and thank you for stopping by my blog.

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Boaz anxiously waits for his servant to finish packing the wagon. He should have left earlier, but it seemed wrong to visit his bride-to-be empty-handed.

Of course, Ruth would just tell him it was unnecessary, considering she was about to join Boaz in his home; still he wanted to do this. He wanted to provide for her and make her happy; to live out the remainder of his life fulfilling her needs. That would be enough for him. That would make him feel complete.

10 Comments

  1. Sorry you’ve been ill! That always makes writing difficult. I like your excerpt. I think it could be a little tighter, maybe sharpen up your word choice and trim some of the strictly unnecessary words, but it’s a nice little moment in their lives and I like the sentiment behind it. Thanks for sharing!

  2. Really enjoying this retelling of Boaz and Ruth. I like that he doesn’t wish to go to her empty handed. Excellent excerpt! (And glad to hear you’re feeling a bit better!)

    1. Thanks for stopping by my blog and following the story. I am looking forward to finishing it up and publishing later this year. I’ll be glad to hear your opinion of the finished work.

  3. Sorry to hear that you’ve been ill, Ruth. Boaz is a good man, wanting to care for her like that. It feels like there’s a tense shift between the first and second sentences. I may have read it wrong though.

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