Six Sentence Sunday

I’ve been ill this past week, and so haven’t gotten much writing done, but I am glad to be back for the second to last Six Second Sunday. In today’s post, borrowing from my work-in-progress, Ruth and Boaz, Boaz has just bought the rights to Naomi’s field and with it, the right to marry to Ruth; and  prepares to bring the news to Ruth. Let me know what you think of today’s excerpt; I appreciate your comments and thank you for stopping by my blog.

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Boaz anxiously waits for his servant to finish packing the wagon. He should have left earlier, but it seemed wrong to visit his bride-to-be empty-handed.

Of course, Ruth would just tell him it was unnecessary, considering she was about to join Boaz in his home; still he wanted to do this. He wanted to provide for her and make her happy; to live out the remainder of his life fulfilling her needs. That would be enough for him. That would make him feel complete.

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  1. Sorry you’ve been ill! That always makes writing difficult. I like your excerpt. I think it could be a little tighter, maybe sharpen up your word choice and trim some of the strictly unnecessary words, but it’s a nice little moment in their lives and I like the sentiment behind it. Thanks for sharing!

  2. Sorry to hear that you’ve been ill, Ruth. Boaz is a good man, wanting to care for her like that. It feels like there’s a tense shift between the first and second sentences. I may have read it wrong though.

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